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Jovial Piper

Posted on September 30, 2011 by Neeks

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Jovial, Taint, Pied.
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Jovial piper,
Woolen pied waistcoat. Skipping.
Tainted river flows.

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Neeks on September 30, 2011 at 12:45 am said:

I used Haiku in English, although I tried to stay with the Japanese rules. I did add the Kigo (season word) woolen – which denotes winter. I think “tainted” accomplished Kire (cutting word) too, with the abrupt contrast of the fun piper to the river and death.

That’s all I can remember about structuring the Haiku, I’m probably forgetting something. Thanks for the diversion John, I needed a break from the stories. This was perfect!

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nelle on September 30, 2011 at 1:02 am said:

I wouldn’t know where to begin! Bravo…

Neither did I (think: Wikipedia) lol. It’s been *cough* just a few years since I did this in high school. BAAAAHAHHAHAAA!

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Hudson Howl on September 30, 2011 at 4:16 am said:

Up until a short time ago I hadn’t a clue of Haiku. I guess I never hung in the ‘write’ circles. An a writer am not. Now I find myself subscribed to a few Haiku sites. No clue as to the recipe of good Haiku. What I do know is what I like -this I like. Good ‘shtufffs’.

Hudson, another one of my subscribers here is on a personal Haiku journey and if you are interested in that poetry his blog is a must. http://thebrainblitz.com/ This guy does Haiku in a wonderful way, it’s a treat to go see his blog each day and see what he posted. Check it out, or better yet ~ subscribe!

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- Hudson Howl on September 30, 2011 at 2:59 pm said:
  
  okay, done. Thank you
  
  I hope you will like it, I certainly do!
  
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  - Hudson Howl on October 1, 2011 at 12:56 am said:
    
    I did like! Since you shared; I would like to share with you. If you have never been to http://fourwindshaiga.wordpress.com/2011/09/30/night-rain/ I think you might enjoy. Similar to thebrainblitz Sandy uses her photos as prompts for her Haiku.
    
    Oh you’re right, that is lovely! Definite LIKE, thanks!
    
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jessicaminyard on September 30, 2011 at 11:44 pm said:

Excellent! You do have a way with words. 🙂

Thank you Jessica, so sweet!

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DesiValentine on October 1, 2011 at 12:27 am said:

Wow! I haven’t read haiku in so long it took me a few minutes to process this. Beautifully done!

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foreverfinite on October 11, 2011 at 9:20 pm said:

Thanks for the comment on my haiku, although mine pale in comparison to yours. I’ve used the “haiku” as a rhythmic template only, but you’ve also managed to capture the elegant simplicity in yours. The image you paint evokes a sense of timelessness that is quite amazing for 9 words.

I have to disagree, I only did the one. Yours was altogether much better!

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